Eternal Bliss (Poem about Vampire Lovers)

[rowena]

I feel awefully bashful about showing this. Um, well, enjoy. This was something I wrote while I was in my vampire phase. Lol. Yeah, Enjoy!


Eternal Bliss

Our dark eyes meet
And I fall in a trance
You're the danger I seek
As we stride to a deadly dance

Your spell is too strong
I can't find strength to let go
We've been going on too fast
Yet we must not slow

I stare into your eyes
I am trapped in your gaze
Simultaneous sighs
Emotions mixed in this daze

You've fallen into a forbidden love
As a Creature of the Night
The moon shines above us
And we bathe in its enchanting light

Two eternal slaves of the dark
Is what we will soon be
In the twilight of our lives
As you sink your teeth into me

Your teeth penetrate my flesh
Your venom spreads to my heart
Pain searing my entire body
One life ends...another will start

I twirl in your arms
I stare at your face
I kiss your lips
You strip me of all my grace

We fall to the floor
Breath hot with need and want
Our bodies locked in an embrace
Your rhythm very blunt

Collapsing against your body
Reaching oblivion and grasping ecstasy
Shuddering and yelling your name
Pledging my love and eternity

If to be with you is to become like you
Then sink your teeth into my wrist
Transform me to a Creature of the Night
Let's spend forever in eternal bliss…

[Meeva]

I like it. ^^

[Jeni]

I really like your poem Rowena. Great job! It was very well written!
One thing I have an issue with is this line, the last one in the 3rd to last stanza.
"Your rhythm very blunt"
It just doesn't go...

[rowena]

Yeah I had to ryhme it with something. Oh gosh now I'm laughing. That part is um... well. Ack!

[Jeni]

But, want and blunt don't ryhme....

[rowena]

O.O really? is blunt a long u sound? oh gosh! i thought i was short u sound........................ i pronounce want as wunt with short u-sound..... Oh dear, me.

[Jeni]

*laughs* Oooo, then that makes sense. But, that's not really how it's pronounced. Maybe you can find another word that rhymes with want.

[rowena]

Oh my gosh! How is "want" pronounced? Or is it "blunt" that's not pronounced correctly? O.O;;; Oh dear.... >.<;;;

[Avi]

It's awesome. And creepy. But it's stil lovely....
Although I have an issue with the second line in the last stanza. Just because I hate wrists. -shudders- So nothing on your part, really....just me.

[rowena]

Ah. I really like wrists. I like ears even more. Ha ha. I hate feet........ *shudders*

[Avi]

I just don't like wrists. -nods-